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I'm sitting on a filthy crumb-filled carpet
full of ground-in raisins and toast crumbs
wearing a yellow hard-hat several sizes too small
and I wouldn't be anywhere else.

I've been awake all night; cuddling and singing
stumbling from one room to another, desperate
to fix it all and failing in my every effort
but I wouldn't have been anywhere else.

We play monotonously. Car goes up, car goes down
and a small commanding voice directs the action
and I am tired, so tired I don't understand the game
but I wouldn't be anywhere else.

I receive a kiss, more snot than lips, without thinking
I wipe his nose and mouth with my hands, deposit
the mess on my jeans without a second thought
and I wouldn't be anywhere else.

He cries, and whines, his spots are itchy and he
doesn't understand, can't comprehend why I in my wisdom
don't click my fingers and bring it all to an end. I fail him
still I wouldn't be anywhere else.

We're exhausted, both of us, though he hides it well
dragging me to and fro, to do this and that,
and I wistfully think of my soft, comfy bed
but really I wouldn't be anywhere else.
I wouldn't be anywhere else.
I have a notebook full of writing here that I haven't yet submitted, so I'm going to put some of it up, see what you lot think of it.
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IndieBeatles Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2008
Brilliant, as always
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MommaNyx Featured By Owner May 18, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
This is one of those pieces that only another mother could fully understand. Beautiful poem!
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switchbladeserenade Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
This brought a tear to my eye. I miss my boy so much... :(
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww. :hug: When do you get to see him next?
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switchbladeserenade Featured By Owner May 17, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Soon. I'll see him on July 1st. But I'm hoping to get him back full time in a year or two. :fingerscrossed:
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 17, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
You going to take him to Scotland with you then?
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switchbladeserenade Featured By Owner May 18, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm hoping. :fingerscrossed: I'll worry about things as they come though.
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CrazyFoxMoon Featured By Owner May 15, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
So very sweet! How's Orion doing?
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
He's seeming better now. He keeps telling me "Spots goin' away, Mummy!" and pointing to his belly. He's not poorly at all any more, just a bit itchy and sore where the spots are.
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CrazyFoxMoon Featured By Owner May 18, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
That's great. Glad you both are getting through this all right.
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tintalasia Featured By Owner May 15, 2008   Photographer
I'm a mom. I've sat on that 'carpet' too. You put your heart and soul into your writing.... it pays off. Beautiful!
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot... glad I'm not the only one and glad you enjoyed it. :D
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JulesTheNorweegie Featured By Owner May 15, 2008
I think this is a great poem :D
Very down to earth :) I can feel it
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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JulesTheNorweegie Featured By Owner May 17, 2008
`most welcome m`dear ;) :hug:
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MrsNox Featured By Owner May 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Hee, apart from the 'snot' part this was rely cute! ;)
Great poem again!
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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MissUnderstand Featured By Owner May 15, 2008
Aw.
Chicken pox?
Lucky to have such a wonderful parent.
Cute poem!
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 15, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :)
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Rushy Featured By Owner May 15, 2008
Beautiful piece!
:+fav:
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 15, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw thank you. :love:
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