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It's too late, buddy. Your attempts at appeasement
on this post-fuck armchair have long since lost their strength.
It's too late for sweet words and oh-so-fucking soft kisses -
     too late for you to try to win this oh-so-dirty fight.
You thought you'd won -
                                I thought you'd won.
We both saw predator and prey and knew which we were,
  and I was falling for your flights of fancy, succumbing
to your every sensual desire, seeing situations
  where I was yours completely; I saw myself fading.

I was your possession, not even a person, a plaything.
My cunt was a cup from which you supped at will
  and hid in a cupboard when you had visitors, ashamed.

You were not expecting my ascension. I spent so long
trying to please you here -
                                   on my back, as I was used by you
for every sordid fucking pleasure which caught your whim -

You were not expecting your toy, your breathing doll
  to speak, to have a mind. I caught you off-guard.
It's too late, buddy. Your pussy-on-demand has a voice

and it has teeth -
                          and the next time you dare to come near

it will bite.
03.03.08 - D'awwww. Thanks to ^StJoan and *ThornyEnglishRose for the DD. :aww:
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Given 2008-03-03
When I was sent this piece my first reaction was: Panties, need new ones. ThornyEnglishRose says: Too Late by =ghostlove is quite possibly the angriest poem I have found on dA thus far. Every word is injected with venom that only adds to the poetic excellence. ( Suggested by ThornyEnglishRose and Featured by StJoan )
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SleentheBeast Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
Oh yeah...you deserved that DD. Raw emotion. Unbridled. Truth. You gutted your soul on paper. Nice. And I was politic over a poem. Gonna go change that error now. Enjoyed our chat the other day. Finally got to sit down and browse your gallery.
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for your kind words. :)
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SleentheBeast Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Professional General Artist
Your very welcome. Lol... I'm missing half my left thumb from an incident with a table saw. I always tell young fellas when they ask me how I lost I that I ran across a girl with teeth in her pussy. They always get this look on their face. The end of your poem made me giggle
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful anger, if that makes sense.
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18yrold Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2008   Writer
Fav'ed, because I love it.

But there is something about the lines:
"and it has teeth -
and the next time you dare to come near

it will bite."
that I just do not like. It jus tmakes me think of the over-used meme Toothy Vagina. I was thinking something along the lines of:
And it has power
and the next time you dare to come near

But that doesn't work, I don't know, it's just them lines, the rest is so hard to critique it's unbelievable. Beautiful work.
It will weild it.
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I was kind of thinking of the vagina dentata myth at the time. :)
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areasonforyou Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2008
Holy fuck. This is so powerful. I love this, it pretty much sums up how I felt when I got out of my abusive relationship. This is so so amazing.
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deliciouschaos Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
awesome.
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YumeAkuma Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Wow, that's...almost scary. I wouldn't want to be whoever the narrator is mad at, I really wouldn't. Well done, love your word choices, usually Im not the one for a lot of vulgar vocabulary because I think there are better ways to show anger and other emotions, but this is so right and it fits and works so well. Congrats on the DD! :D
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UncleGran-Gran Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
:highfive:
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mercury-yume Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
there is so much pride in the voice, it's great.
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AllTheSame Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Student General Artist
Yikes, lol. Your icon is such a stark contrast.

A very barbed wake-up call. It captures how we cut up our abusers in our minds (and in reality as well).

Reminds me a little of a film called "Hard Candy" with Ellen Page, in a VERY different role from her better-known recent hit.

This piece has that same "unexpected knife in the gut" feeling it produces. I suppose especially because I'm male (though I'm not in the habit of abusive relationships).



"Hell hath no fury..."
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moab-software Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Very direct feeling, kudos, but I wouldn't go as far as ThornyEnglishRose's comments.
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Oooh, have you found angrier poetry? I'd love to see it. I love emotional writing. :D
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savagedryad Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Professional General Artist
I normaly never read the lit here on DA nor do I ever favorite them..... This should tell you how much I love this. I've been there. Done that and bitten back. Never let anyone tell you that you should do otherwise.
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llama-demon Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008   Writer
Well written. Now I have a toothed-vagina phobia, though.
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, never heard of vagina dentata...? ;)
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batousaijin Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2008
ahaha, the great equalizer! :rofl: in that article did you read the part about anti-rape condoms? yowch! what a great idea though for giving the attacker something to think about when he's holding an ice-pack on his crotch in the ER or getting shanked in the prison courtyard.
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llama-demon Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2008   Writer
*cowers in fear*
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m-i-n-k-k Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Oh, the hate!

It's so tangible. Gives me chills...

fantastic piece :)
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maketheVoicesSTOP Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Amazing.

I love this. It's so angry. The emotions that exploded for being bottled up inside for so long are clear and over-spilling with greatness. A DD well deserved!
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faye-girl Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Worth the D.D.
Very angry, but smug almost.
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lovehatecantdecide Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Wow, amazingly written.
I especially love the last sentences towards the end.
:heart:
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GossamerInnocence Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Very nice. The only thing that popped out at me that I didn't like was the "pussy-on-demand" line. After the use of the much more pejorative "cunt," "pussy" seemed more like a weak attempt at being blunt, even if it would have been effective on its own. I would change it to something less offensive, so it doesn't seem so much like you tried and fell short, or find an even stronger word. Other than that, great job, though!
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atelierashes Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
beautiful execution.
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Ringo45 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
I love the courage and the strength to stand up against being used as an object. This is very powerful, and definitely earns my sympathy for those enduring the superficiality of others towards women as a tool for sex.
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herckle Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
That is fucken awesome.
Know how you feel!
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playacardzright Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
very deep!! and enjoyed :hug:
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AStaticPhotograph Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
I adore this.
The structure is beautiful, the word choice is so blunt and descriptive... just wow.
I don't post my poetry, but I do write.
I wish I could write like this.
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meghan-solo Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
aaawesome

:heart: :clap: congrats!
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waywardnonnie Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Wow... This left me speechless. I can't even begin to describe the emotions that it inspired in me. All I can say is that the anger is tangible, and realistic, and of course, the situation sad. You did a great job writing this.
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ophelein Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Very very good! It really gets the message across and does so in an interesting way! Yay, good writing!

nnnnnn... wow. too many exclaimation points.
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Sapraedon Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
This is very very awesome. ^__^
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squirrels-are-evil Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Angriest?
...hardly

Though an effective peice I will admit; I wouldn't put it above the rest of the poets on DA who have written much angrier peices about similiar occurances
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
FAQ #873: What do I do when I disapprove of a Daily Deviation feature?: "If you have a problem with a particular Daily Deviation feature, do NOT leave your disapproval among the other comments on the piece. It is disrespectful to both the artist featured, and the Gallery Director who chose it."
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squirrels-are-evil Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
dissapproval? No my dissapproval was of the description provided in the Daily Deviation, not the piece itself
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I don't see what business you have disapproving of my description. Keywords: quite possibly and I. And so it is, quite possibly the angriest piece I have found. I never said it was the angriest piece on dA, and - I would have thought this was implicit, but clearly not - I don't expect anyone to agree with me.
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squirrels-are-evil Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I have every right to complain when you use a word such as angriest. It unfairly establishes a standard which cuts out the other numerous DA poets who have posted much, much more angrier pieces. Now this doesn't make their works "better" in any way, but they are angrier none the less.

Saying that this peice is "quite possibly the angriest piece" shows that you don't really browse the poetry section in DA enough, because if you did I'm sure you'd come to know a few angry writers that would make your head spin in a different direction.

Had you use words like "this is an angry poem" or "this is an angrier poem" I wouldn't have said anything, but "angriest"...nay
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Never mind that it's a subjective comment - suggesting a DD is a good thing to do. I do not deserve to be criticised for it.
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squirrels-are-evil Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I was never criticising that, only the description provided
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Aha. :)
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Explaining what you like about the piece is part of the process of suggesting a DD. I'm sorry you feel that my compliment of your work deserves to be criticised.
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quentinwrites Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't think it does at all, and your compliment made me squee muchly... I just didn't want to devolve into an argument with the 'critic' here in the deviation comments. :hug:
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thecatseesyou Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
wow this really speaks to me, been there done that
faves!
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kibirkstele Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
wow, this is amazing work, left me speechless, congratz for DD! It is definetly worth it!
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Burnie-Sedai Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
... Sweet! It had a weird and cool flow to it that I couldn't pinpoint, and it just made the poem cooler!
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SkysongMA Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Student Writer
P.O.'ed poetry equals :heart: This poem is wonderful- full of delicious, surprising little images. The alliteration is good, too.
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ravenclawxwhitewolf Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008   Writer
That was amazing - it's on fire! :+fav:
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MacabreMagpie Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008
Power and rage conveyed through simplicity.
Nicely done :clap:
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tamrunsfree Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008   Writer
Well, I like it. You've conveyed anger; and warning. I also understand your repitition (the alliteration in your second stanza is fun when read out loud) of 'fucking', but I'm not so sure that it adds anything, or if it's only there for the word's own boldness.

I think I'd like to check out your other work now. :)
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